Friday, January 29, 2016

The Barren Pot




    Long ago, in a kingdom all but forgotten by the passage of time, there lived a young child. Now this child was neither strong nor fast. They were not smart or savvy. They were just a child like any other who was born of a mother and a father who worked hard for what they had and cared deeply for their child.
    At the same time, there lived a King. He was well known for being cunning and clever and always finding a way to turn the worst situation into the best. He had ruled the kingdom for many years. While some thought ill of him and others held deep love, the one thing everyone agreed on was that he was an honest King. A man of the people who always spoke his mind and told his citizens the truth of what was going on; for better or for worse.
    But, clever or kind, honest or not, the one thing a great King cannot escape; nay! What no man, woman, or child can escape is the passage of time.
    The King had become quite old over the years. A handsome brown beard had become wispy and white. Burning eyes that watched the court’s every movement had become clouded and grey. The oak that had stood tall bowed to the wind and the rain.
    Sadly, the King had never married.
    Some say he had loved in his youth but lost her before gaining the crown. Others believed that he was always simply too busy to seek a wife to sire him an heir. Whatever the reason, the King held no heir. No person to take the crown in the approaching date of his death.
    Now what might this have to do with our young child, you ask? Just listen, and you will see.
    The child, while doing their chores, heard an announcement from one of the King’s men.
    “All who wish for a chance at the crown, make way to the court!” the man bellowed.
    How odd. The child thought. How peculiar indeed.
    Now, the child held little interest in the matters of court, but their mother and father, who worked so hard and so long for their place in life, wanted more. They rushed to the court with the young child in tow.
    “No pushing! No shoving!” shouted a man at the gates. “You’ll all get your turn.”
    And they did. Man, woman, and child were paraded through the court like show ponies before the old King and the guards in shining armor. Some ladies danced and sung to demonstrate their prowess while men showed off their great muscles and their swordsmanship. But it was never enough for the King…
    What did he want? The child wondered.
    Dozens of people were turned away.
    Then hundreds.
    After thousands of people had been turned away by the King, only twenty remained before him. Our young child and nineteen other bright eyed youths.
    “You twenty are the ones I believe show the most promise.” The King said in a raspy and tired tone. “You are the ones who I believe are the best hope for this kingdom. The best hope to take my throne…”
    The guards produced a table from beneath a heavy cloth. On this table, twenty clay pots rested quietly in two rows. Off to the side, a single glass bowl held a number of little seeds.
    “While I think you all have potential, the crown fits only one.” The King went on to say. “And so I will give you all a task.”
    With a wave of his wrinkled, shaking hand, the King motioned towards the pots and the seeds.
    “You will each take one pot and one seed. You will be given two months to grow that which you can from that which you are given.”
    The crowd gasped aloud.
    “You mean to tell me you leave our lives in the hands of gardeners?” a man shouted in anger from the court.
    The King did not respond.
    “In two months’ time, you will return with your pot and your seed and whatever has come of it. I’m curious to see what great and tall plants will come of this endeavor.”
    And so the young child, along with nineteen other youths, were given a pot and a seed and sent on their way.
    At first, the child was hopeful. They planted the seed right away and cared for it carefully. They watered it and fertilized it and let the pot rest in sun and in shade, just in case the plant needed either. They spent every waking hour watching the pot, waiting for the first sprout to show.
    But, after several days, nothing…
    “I’m sure it’s just taking a while.” The young child’s mother said.
    And so they kept trying. Soon, days turned to weeks and still nothing.
    “Perhaps the seed is bad.” The young child’s father said. “If only we knew what type of plant it was so we might replant it.”
    The young child said nothing. Instead, they went for a walk through the village to look at the other plants that the children were growing.
    It wasn’t long before the child reached his nearest neighbor and saw the beautiful morning glory flowers that were blooming from the pot. In weeks it was already vining and budding.
    Oh no! Look at that flower! It’s gorgeous already!
    They continued on to the next house where they saw the next pot. To the child’s surprise, a red rose was growing out of the pot!
    A rose? But the last flower was a morning glory…
    Entranced, the young child continued on. In the walk, they saw five morning glories, four roses, six petunias, three snapdragons, and one lily.
    Returning home, they looked down at the barren empty pot and smiled with realization.
    Soon, two months had passed and the children once again stood in the King’s court with their pots in hand. Everyone laughed and singed and pointed at the gorgeous flowers that every youth held. Everyone had a beautiful flower except the young child. Their pot was still empty.
    Many people pointed and laughed and mocked the child but they remained quiet.
    “A gorgeous morning glory.” The King said to the first child as he called them up to show what had grown. “Truly you have a knack for this kind of work. Step back until I make my decision.”
    “What a beautiful rose.” The King said to the next child. “Hold there until a decision has been made.”
    It continued like this one by one. Praises and compliments and standing ovations for the gorgeous plants each youth held. Until finally, the King reached the young child who stood before him with their barren pot.
    “And you, child. Your pot is empty. You are surrounded by beauty and fairness by all the other competitors. Why do you approach me today.”
    “B-b-because, your M-majesty. You wanted to see what came of this endeavor and you have seen it.”
    “That I have.” The King said, a joy slipping into his cracking old voice.
    “We have our new sovereign!” the King declared to the shocked gasps and guffaws of the court. “And my heir!”
    “But how?!” cried the parent of one of the children. “My boy’s rose is the most beautiful here and that child has nothing in their pot!”
    “And that is why.” The King said with a smile. “For they are the only one to have nothing in their pot.”
    The court felt silent at this.
    “Tell me, sir.” The King said to the parent’s youth. “Where did you get your rose seed?”
    The youth hung their head in shame. “My parents, your Majesty.”
    “And you?” he asked another.
    “The gardener.” She said with tears in her eyes.
    The same repeated another seventeen times, one by one, as the King revealed how every child or parent had planted new seeds when they realized the seed they had was barren. The young child, neither cunning nor witty, but honest, was the only one who did not cheat in hopes of winning the contest.
    “And you, child” the King said, “Where did you get your seed.”
    “Your Majesty, the King.”
    Before a shocked crowd and a gaping court, the child and their parents were raised up before the other men and women in the room to join the King at his side. Over the years, he taught the child everything he knew and, far too soon, faded with time. But the child, now strong and smart from the great King’s tutelage, went on to become one of the greatest Lieges the kingdom had ever known, always remembering the lessons the King had taught them.




(Please note that most will realize this is not an original story. Instead, this is a story inspired by an old Chinese Folk story “The Empty Pot (An Owlet Book)”. Obviously this is my take on the idea with my own adages and a European spin, however I cannot take any credit for the tale itself and do not wish to. Instead I hope that you enjoyed.)

Thursday, January 28, 2016

Tuesday, December 29, 2015

Getting Back in the Game



Hey Everyone,

I'm sure that it's no news that I've been out of commission for the last two months. I only just realized that I never actually posted my news-warning that I wouldn't be here! I'm so sorry! Long story short, the holidays (November and December) are absolute nightmares for me at work. Couple that with a number of personal things that I needed to take care of, I've had little to no time to myself...much less any to do anything useful with.

I'm happy to say that I will be returning. Keep your ear to the ground and be ready to see a return to normal scheduling here in the next couple of days. Of course things posted will include prompts and ideas, writing practices, reviews, and, should I find the time and those interested, I would like to start forming a network for both writers and commissioners to help find each other to build the literature community.

If you need anything from our end, don't hesitate to reach out! Aside from that, we'll be back in the game within the week! Sorry again for the wait.


- Rob

Thursday, November 5, 2015

Book Review - The Antagonists: Book One



First, before we begin, allow me to say that figuring out how to rate this book was one of my bigger struggles. As a whole, I really do like the concept behind the book. It's about a young colored woman, confined to a wheel chair, down on her luck and suffering with the trials of day to day living when she meets a group of superheros. It's only after she's had a moment to deal with them that she realizes the heroes are in fact a bigoted and hateful group that use her for their own means while the villain (ahem: Antagonist) is the one who sides with her.

This is a fresh concept that I can say I've never seen before. It's fun. It's funny. It's thought provoking. I absolutely love the idea behind it and would like to see more done with it. Unfortunately, while I was hoping for an analytic examination of the superhero/villain genre along with some smart/funny commentary on social treatment of a main character that doesn't fit the "White Male Hero" trope; that was not what I got.

To begin, it's quite clear that Burgandi Rakoska is an amateur writer. I've done some quick and dirty research and I've realized that this was a book of passion. A story that she came up with out of the blue and, given drive from friends and family, was encouraged to make her idea a reality. In a way this is fantastic. Nothing good will ever come into this world without the passion to drive it. On the other, I believe she would have benefited from more writing practice.

I will start with the easy one: Formatting and Typographical errors. I won't beat the dead horse here since literally most every review talks about the excess number of formatting errors and typos, so just know that they're there.

More to the point, the book has two primary issues: Control of Time and Awkward Narrative and Phrasing. Regarding Time, it's clear that Rakoska had a number of ideas that she wanted to deliver but wasn't sure just quite how to run them together. This gives the story a bit of a "choppy" feel. You'll have this sudden speed up to one thing or another coupled with a very slow and precise detailing of another scene. Entire days are missed utilizing the 'character knocked unconscious' trope, resulting in the characters telling us rather than showing us what happened.

Couple this with the Awkward narrative and some sections of the book can be extremely difficult to get through. Again, it's clear that Rakoska had a very genuine love for and wanted to see an atypical main character. However, she begins inserting things that are just odd or don't make sense. One scene (a fight scene), out of the clear blue sky, starts talking at length about the sexuality of Merlin. In the context of the fight it might have made sense to have a one off here, but we're talking a LENGTHY discussion arguing like kindergartners. Another example has to do with no one is supposed to be able to enter Victor's home but, because of the specific wording of the spell, Minnie (the main character) is able to roll in. This is funny on it's own, but then her sister is able to run into the house later on, basically making it seem like the only people who can't enter the house are those on a casual stroll.

When all is said and done, the book has a number of fun ideas. Aside from the attempt at social commentary, the book features appearances from greats like Nicholas Flamel, the creator of the Philosopher's Stone. It has an amazing twist with one of the superheroes having a rather unexpected power. It even has a very pleasant ending that will make the toils of the book seem worthwhile.

Overall, the book has heart but is in desperate need of an accompanying editor and maybe even a second, more experienced author to help Rakoska focus her abilities and thoughts. I understand that she's in the process of creating a second entry into the Antagonists series and I'd be lying if I didn't admit I was looking forward to it. This is a series that deserves to do well, it just needs the technical delivery to get it there. Heck, if Rakoska were to re-write Book 1, I can assure you I'd be one of the first ones to pick it back up.

Saturday, October 31, 2015

Starving







    The roar was overwhelming; a rumble that Charlie could feel through his bones and in his guts. And in seconds it was over. It left them coughing and sputtering in the near dark as they gagged on dust and bits of rock that had fallen from the ceiling.
    No one asked if anyone else was alright. They were too focused on what had just happened. One by one, the few flashlights in the tunnel came to shine on the looming wall of rock that blocked their path.
    “Oh god…” Beth sobbed out.
    “No…no no no no no!” Andrew ran from the spot he had fallen and began pounding on the rock wall. It didn’t shudder. Instead, the entire tunnel began to tremble as little rocks and streams of dust fell from the ceiling.
    Charlie was on him in a moment, pulling him away.
    “NO! WE HAVE TO GET OUT OF HERE!” Andrew screamed. His eye were wide with panic.
    “You can’t, you idiot! You’re gonna collapse the entire tunnel!”
    A moment after being dragged away, his jaw went slack and his arms fell at his side as he simply stared at the cave-in. He felt like a sack of potatoes in Charlie’s arms. With as much care as he could muster, he set his friend back against the wall.
    Silence fell again as they each came to grips with what had just happened.
    What were they to do? What could they do? The tunnel they were in was part of a small mine in a ghost town amusement park. It didn’t go anywhere and instead was just filled with some pictures of old miners and some crappy lamps. No food, no water, nothing but a curved stretch of tunnel that went on for maybe a hundred or so feet and ended in some stupid tribute to the mine’s founder.
    Charlie suddenly regretted not eating lunch before they went in here.
    Anna was the first to say what they all were thinking.
    “How long do you think it will take for them to find us?”
    “Finding us isn’t the issue.” Charlie answered. “It’s the question of how much rock is in that tunnel and how fast they can dig us out. Even worse, will they collapse the tunnel trying to get to us?”
    Charlie’s glanced over to Andrew who, at the mention of the tunnel collapsing, buried his head in his lap and curled into a large, sobbing mess.
    “Alright. Let’s take inventory.” Julia said in her normal snide tone. She started snapping her fingers as she said, “Everyone turn out your pockets! Let’s see what we’ve got.”
    Two pocket knives. A Brochure. A half a packet of Starburst. Some receipts. Wallets. Keys. Cellphones with no reception.
    “This is all the food we’ve got?” Julia asked with a grimace as she stared at the packet of Starburst.
    “That’s it.” Beth said weakly.
    “We’re gonna have to ration it.” Elena said.
    Andrew couldn’t help but start laughing. He uncurled slightly to glare at her with tear soaked eyes.
    “Are you fucking kidding?! It’s a half a packet of candy. It’s not exactly a box of MREs!”
    “Then we’ll keep your share.” Julia snapped before putting the Starburst in her pocket.
    After that, they sat around. None of them really talked. There wasn’t anything to say. Every now and then, one of them would wander down the tunnel. Perhaps it was to see if some magical new way had opened up or maybe it was just to use the bathroom.
    Every now and again, Charlie listened for the sound of rescue: the clink of tools or maybe shouting. He heard nothing.
    All too soon, Julia had distributed the last of the Starburst. Charlie was pretty sure she kept the extra piece for herself, but had no way to prove it. Not like it mattered. It could hardly be called a meal. It did nothing to quench his hunger.
    “GODDAMNIT!” Julia screeched. “WHAT’S TAKING THEM SO LONG?!”
    “Give it a fucking rest, Julia.” Charlie said. “Bitching isn’t gonna do anything and you’re getting on my nerves.”
    “Oh YOUR nerves, huh?” She said, snapping her fingers in his face. “This was all YOUR idea! You’re the one who wanted to go in this fucking mine. We could have gone to the haunted house!”
    “Get your fingers out of my face.” Charlie said with a growl.
    “Or what? You’ll kill me?” Julia said with a sneer. “Great. You’ll just save me the joy of starving to death in this fucking tunnel.”
    Something snapped in his mind and Charlie couldn’t control himself. He punched Julia square in the nose. Blood sprayed and she crumpled back against the far wall.
    “YOU ASSHOLE!”
    Her hands were covered in blood as she covered her now bleeding nose. Beth and Elena rushed to her side.
    “I’m…I’m  sorry…” Charlie said.
    No one else said anything and Charlie quickly fled to the far end of the tunnel. He found Andrew there.
    “What happened?” he asked quietly, not looking up from his lap.
    “I think I might have just broken Julia’s nose.”
    “Good.” He said softly. “The rotten bitch deserves it.”
    Charlie felt like he should have said something to argue, but he had to agree. Julie had always been insufferable and now that they were trapped down here, her bitchiness had escalated to the point that even looking at her made Charlie dream of bashing her head in with a rock.
    “You know she stole the extra Starburst, right?”
    “Yea…I figured.” Charlie said with a sigh.
    “What are we gonna do for food, man? There’s nothing in here and I don’t know how much longer we’ll last.”
    “We could always eat Julia as punishment for the Starburst.” Charlie said with a chuckle. To Charlie’s surprise, Andrew didn’t laugh with him. Instead, he looked surprisingly pensive.
    “Look, man. I was just joking. I know that’s your Ex.” Charlie finally said.
    “No. You’re right.”
    “What do you mean ‘right’? Right about what?”
    “We’re gonna have to eat Julia.” Andrew said, his voice disturbingly calm.
    “WHAT?! Are you insane?!”
    “On the contrary. How much longer do you think we can last without something to eat? Personally, I can’t go on without something. Those Starburst were nothing and they were all we had. Not to mention it’s just been so long since we had anything…”
    “But Andrew…” Charlie’s mind was reeling. He was trying to think but his mind just wouldn’t. It was too starved. “You’re talking about killing someone. We’re talking about cannibalism!”
    “Yea.”
    “Ok, dude. You’re kind of scaring me. I’m gonna go check if I didn’t do any permanent damage to Julia’s beak. Just stay here, alright?”
    Charlie tried to get up. It took all the strength he had. He was just too hungry. That, combined with the thought of fresh meat, as appalling as the idea was, his entire body clamored for anything it could get. He finally made his way back down the tunnel.
    “You ok?” He asked as he walked back up to the girls.
    “No, you fucking asshat! You punched me in the face!” Julia barked, her face covered in blood from her nose.
    “I’m sorry. I really am. It’s just-“
    “Just nothing!” Julia was on him a flash. She pushed him and shoved him and snapped her fingers in his face. “You think you’re hot shit and just because of who your daddy is you can push anyone around!”
    “It’s not-“
    She kept shoving him, slamming his back against the wall of the tunnel. Beth kept chiming in, trying to tell Julia to calm down, but she wasn’t having it.
    “You think you can just break my fucking nose, say sorry, and it’ll all be ok? Well guess what, it’s not! When I get out of here I’m going get a lawyer and I’m going to fucking sue your-“
    *CRACK!*
    There was a sickening crunch and Julia crumpled to the ground. Beth started screaming. Elena just stared. Charlie didn’t know what to do. He hadn’t even seen Andrew come in and now, there he was, with a bloody rock in his hand and crimson soaking Julia’s black hair.
    Lifting the rock high, Andrew repeatedly smashed in Julia’s head. Each time the crunching crack become wetter and squishier.
    “Stop!” Charlie screamed, grabbing both of his arms. Luckily Andrew didn’t fight because Charlie was sobbing too uncontrollably to have done much else.
    He couldn’t see Julia’s face anymore. Most of it was covered by her hair and the back of head which was a splintered and gory mess.
    “Why would you…?” Beth tried to ask amongst sobs.
    “We need to eat.” Andrew said coldly. “If you think I’m gonna starve to death in this tunnel than you’ve got another thing coming. And I definitely ain’t gonna do it when I’ve got this bag of bitch walking around wasting space.”
    Nonchalantly, Andrew dragged her body a few feet away, pulled out his pocket knife, and began to examine the body. He seemed to be trying to figure out where to start cutting.
    Charlie was still in shock. His back against the wall, he slid down to sitting. He found his gaze drifted back and forth from Andrew, trying to decide what to eat, Beth and Elena with Beth looking horrified and Elena fascinated, and then finally the bits of brain and skull that were scattered across the rocks next to him.
    For a while, he just watched. Watched Andrew fillet Julia as easily as you might a fish. Watched him take chunk after chunk and eat it with elation. Watched Elena join him shortly after and dig in to Julia’s upper thigh.
    Finally, it was too much. Charlie’s stomach growled and groaned. He was too weak. He was too hungry.
    “Can I…Can I have a…?”
    “Yes you can.”
    Andrew carved off several slices of Julia’s back and passed it to him. Holding them, they felt cold and slimy. Charlie couldn’t help but wish they’d been able to cook them somehow. But, given basic amenities, they probably wouldn’t be eating Andrew’s Ex.
    He took a bite.
    And was surprised how much he liked it.
    While he definitely wished again that he could roast it somehow, to his surprise it tasted and smelled vaguely like pork. He ate it bite by bite and soon every bit and piece was gone and he was licking the remains of Julia off his fingers.
    Beth joined in soon after.
    It was only after they had eaten every bit, every morsel, and every part of Julia and sat fat and happy in the darkness that the tunnel began to tremble again. Dust filtered from the ceiling above and little bits of rock rained down on the hollowed out remains of Julia.
    They didn’t run. There wasn’t anything they could do. They sat quietly and accepted their fate. If they died in a cave in then it was only fitting for what they’d just done, Charlie thought.
    A moment later, the rock wall burst forward as a man with a pickaxe and another man with a large sledgehammer made their way through. The group could see light behind them. They could hear people talking and chattering in the distance of the tunnel.
    Freedom!
    Charlie jumped up in joy, as did Beth, Elena, and Andrew.
    The two men, their rescuers, recoiled in horror and held up the tools as if to defend themselves. From the group.
    “Dear god!” The man with the pickaxe screamed as he surveyed the empty carcass of Julia and the blood soaked mouths of Charlie and his friends. “What happened…?”
    Charlie hung his head as he tried to wipe the blood from his mouth. He only made the mess worse.
    “We did what we had to in order to survive...” He said quietly. The others nodded their heads in agreement.
    “What you had to?” The man asked in terror and shock. “YOU’VE ONLY BEEN IN HERE FOR FIFTEEN MINUTES!”






(Hey everyone. I figured we'd end Spookytober on a bit of a funnier note. I really hope you enjoyed. With that said, we will be returning to our regular schedule and, as such, feel free to join us for prompts and practice, 6 word and two sentence stories, along with much, much more! I hope everyone has a safe and pleasant Halloween! See you soon!)